In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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started leaving their own
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to the central part of the
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in and around the world,
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started reducing. We will discuss in detail
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point, and it is a negative
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, as the
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started shifting their lifestyle toward the
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environment for the betterment of
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education, healthcare and other benefits,
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impact on
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development
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of their own
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who not even
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to school for
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generations, if
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educated
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moved out of their
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the literacy rate of the
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not improve.
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, the educated
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can write a letter to the officials and fulfil their needs.
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, if no one is educated how the officials know their concern, if
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not moved out of the
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and gathered for their
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is much need
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, they can get the benefits from the government.
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started
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the countryside
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develop gradually.
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surge into the cities, they are
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need to face during the climate seasons. One of the great examples is that recently
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Chennai
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heavy rain and wind that hit the
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time,
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are used to
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a lot from the logging of water and
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across
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cities,
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clearly shows that there is no proper planning in the
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people
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who
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in the countryside
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saved as there is a way the water can flow into the proper channel of nearby ponds or lakes, and
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was destroyed in the cities. In conclusion, moving out
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countryside is a negative
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. Considering the future generation and the
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of their
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will impact the
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life by demolishing the lake and nature ponds. If
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out of the
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, we should take care of our
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and our
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concern was among all everyone
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stay on their
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bring their
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better future for the next generation.
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task response
To improve task response, thoroughly address all parts of the prompt and ensure your position is clear throughout the essay. Provide a balanced argument if the question asks for your opinion on whether it's a positive or negative development.
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Support your main points with specific examples. While you gave some examples, they could be more relevant and detailed. Offer clear information and elaborate on how these examples support your argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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