In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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were
a time Change the verb form
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people
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when people
are
started leaving their own Unnecessary verb
apply
land
and migrated
to the central part of the Wrong verb form
migrating
city
side, and this
was the trend happened
in and around the world, Correct pronoun usage
that happened
due to
which the population in the village
has
started reducing. We will discuss in detail Unnecessary verb
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on
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in
this
essay about
the impact Change preposition
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on
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of
this
movement and with
the examples. I am against Change preposition
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on
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apply
this
point, and it is a negative development
.
Firstly
, as the people
started shifting their lifestyle toward the city
environment for the betterment of children
education, healthcare and other benefits, Change noun form
children's
this
will have huge
impact on Add an article
a huge
development
of their own Add an article
the development
soil
. There are people
who not even go
to school for Wrong verb form
gone
few
generations, if Correct article usage
a few
the
educated Correct article usage
apply
people
moved out of their village
the literacy rate of the village
will
not improve. Wrong verb form
would
Also
, If any demand or request for their people
, the educated people
can write a letter to the officials and fulfil their needs. For example
, in a village
, if no one is educated how the officials know their concern, if people
not moved out of the soil
and gathered for their development
is much need due to
, they can get the benefits from the government. By
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In
this
way, if people
started stay
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staying
in
their Change preposition
on
land
the countryside can
develop gradually.
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could
Secondly
, when people
surge into the cities, they are consequence
need to face during the climate seasons. One of the great examples is that recently Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
the
Chennai Correct article usage
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city
has faced a huge disaster due to
heavy rain and wind that hit the city
. In
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At
this
time, people
are used to struggle
a lot from the logging of water and Change the verb form
struggling
inundated
across Add a missing verb
being inundated
city
cities, this
clearly shows that there is no proper planning in the development
of city
. Add an article
the city
While the
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The
people
who stays
in the countryside Change the verb form
stay
have
saved as there is a way the water can flow into the proper channel of nearby ponds or lakes, and Verb problem
are
this
was destroyed in the cities.
In conclusion, moving out the
countryside is a negative Change preposition
of the
development
. Considering the future generation and the development
of their soil
, and
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apply
this
will impact the city
life by demolishing the lake and nature ponds. If people
started moved
out of the Change the verb form
to move
village
there is
no Wrong verb form
would be
people
come and save their life
, we should take care of our Fix the agreement mistake
lives
soil
and our people
, if this
concern was among all everyone will
stay on their Wrong verb form
would
land
and will
bring their Verb problem
apply
land
for the
better future for the next generation.Correct article usage
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task response
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