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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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 graphs provided reveals the main culprits why agricultural
land
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 becomes more unproductive and how these causes affected three sectors of the world, measured in
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, during the 1990s.
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, over-grazing was the main cause of worldwide
land
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 degradation and Europe experienced the most remarkable effect of
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 degradation. In terms of the reasons leading to
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 deterioration, over-grazing accounted for the most remarkable proportion with 35, narrowly followed by deforestation and over-farming at 30 and 28 respectively. Meanwhile, others made up the least significant number with 2. As for the justification
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 the degradation in
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 quality by specific areas, Europe suffered from the most impact with 23% of total
land
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 degraded. At the opposite end of the scale, just 5% of the total
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 of North America was eroded.
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, 13% of the
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 was negatively damaged in Oceania. To be more specific, regarding Europe, the key factor leading to
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 erosion was deforestation with 9,8%, followed by over-farming and over-grazing with 7,7 and 5,5 respectively. With respect to Oceania, over-grazing played an important role in soul destruction with 11,3%. At the opposite end of the scale, there was no response detecting any emergence of over-cultivation impact in the chart. As for North America, over-cultivation was the most outstanding influence element with 3,3%.
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