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The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010.

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010.
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 developing countries by charities in different nations,measured in
billion
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billions
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 of US
dollar
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,from 2006 to 2010.
Overall
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data
under went
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 a progressive growth pattern .
Besides
,The US donated the most during the process. As for total finance,it began from 15.7 before accelerating consistently to 30
along with
 doubling the starting point in 2010. With respect to the amount of money donated from The UE countries,being the country that
donates
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 the most with 9.7 in 2006,it grew relentlessly to its peak at approximately 23 after
4-year
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 period of time. With regard to the amount of money donated from both EU and other nations,
although
 they had a uniform trend,
the
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differented
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difference
 in levels of growth,
While
 the former hiked slowly from 3.3 to 4.0 ,the latter increased from 2.7 to 3.3. despite a marginal explosion in 2009 in both data.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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