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It is high time men ceased to regard women as second class citizen . To what extant do you agree with this statement?

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In
this
 privileged era
honored
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 with philanthropic thoughts,
women
 have not been considered
second class
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 citizens. One could not envisage any array of titled rights
men
 have had and
women
 have been deprived of, namely, a broad variety of occupations.
This
 endowed lighthearted opportunity for
women
 has its own exclusive merits and demerits; some of which will be discussed and clarified in
this
 essay. To embark on,
this
 would be an astonishing notion for
men
 which,
women
 contribute to the infrastructural affairs of society. Considering the fact that
women
 would witness the
men
's thornier suffering from the enormous workload on their shoulders.
In other words
,
women
 perceive the circumstances and cut down their preposterous grumblings and extortionate expenditures.
Consequently
,
this
 situation can be like
a
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giving life rain for
men
. On another end of the
spectrums
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,
women
 who are immersed in financial, political and any other occupations you care to name have tucked
women
's origin away.
Women
 genetically wired for bearing and rearing babies do not have a long bitter struggle to keep profile. In conclusion,
this
 gentle sex must have been incorporated with activities that corresponded with
whose
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intuition and instinct. Having weighed up all aforementioned
stand points
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, the hard-fought battle between males and females is by no means over. The argument around the deserve and inferiority of both sexes will
be lasting
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 until eternity. The way that I see
this
, prearranged equal dues for
women
 have peculiar pros and cons
however
, I would rather deduce that any responsibility ought to be manipulated with any sex aptitude.
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task response
Ensure the essay addresses all parts of the prompt directly and fully—while you have provided a discussion on the subject, you could strengthen your response by more explicitly addressing the extent of your agreement or disagreement with the statement.
coherence
Work on creating a clear and logical structure. Organize paragraphs in a logical manner, with clear topic sentences that signal the main idea. Cohesive devices should be used accurately and effectively.
cohesion
Support main points with specific examples or reasoned arguments. Rather than making broad statements, provide concrete evidence to substantiate your claims.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • second-class citizen
  • gender roles
  • stereotyping
  • misogyny
  • social equality
  • legal rights
  • gender pay gap
  • underrepresentation
  • leadership
  • decision-making
  • cultural portrayals
  • media representation
  • upbringing
  • gender equality
  • advocacy
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