WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
The given graph illustrates information about the percentage of the
workforces
in two different countries over a period of 6 years from 1993 to 1999. All in all, what is concluded from these line charts is that employment in the USA has witnessed a substantial plunge in the majority of the given period, and on the other end of the scale Fix the agreement mistake
workforce
the
job vacancy has seen a dramatic sore trend in the corresponding period of time.
If we catch a glimpse at Correct article usage
apply
figures
, Correct article usage
the figures
it is clear that
the employment proportion notably dropped from 7 in 1993 to 5.5 in1995.afterward this
trend has
experienced a slight surge between 1995 and 1996 from 5.5 to 6 Unnecessary verb
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percent
Change the spelling
per cent
however
, followed this
the workforce percentage have
in Unnecessary verb
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fronted
with a temperate decline so that it reached 5 proportion in 1996. After that. these statistics Change the form of the verb
front
fluctuate
around 5 Wrong verb form
fluctuated
percentage
until 1999.
To respect Japanese data we can deduce that, occupation opportunities in Replace the word
per cent
this
country have come across with significant growth from 2.5 to just under 4.5 percent
from 1983 to 1996. Change the spelling
per cent
Next,
there is a minor decrease between 1996 and 1997 to about 4 proportion and in 1996 this
rate has
commenced a new upward trend so that it reached over 5 Unnecessary verb
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percent
in Change the spelling
per cent
in
1998 .Remove the redundancy
apply
nonetheless
after
this
time in corresponding with the USA records the
Japan's employment level has fluctuated between 1998 and 1999.Correct article usage
apply
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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