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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
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The line graph compares
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energy
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the energy
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 consumption of 6 types of
fuel
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 which are petrol and oil, coal, natural
gas
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, nuclear, solar/wind, and
hydropower
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 in the USA from 1980 to 2008 and anticipation until 2030.
It is clear that
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 petrol and oil is the major
fuel
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 which consumes a lot of
energy
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 in 1980 and
the
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 future as well.
Hydropower
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 uses
energy
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 far less than other fuels. In 1980, petrol and oil utilized 35
quadrillion
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units
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 as the main
fuel
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. Natural
gas
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 fuels 20
quadrillion
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units
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 and coal used a little over 15
units
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. The other source of
energy
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 had a negligible amount of
energy
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 consumption at about 3
units
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.
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, five years later coal overtook natural
gas
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 and became the second
fuel
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 in utilizing
energy
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. The statistical information shows that the consumption of
energy
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 will rise dramatically to almost 50
quadrillion
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units
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. The usable
energy
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 by natural
gas
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 will increase to 25
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2014 and will remain steady at
this
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 level. Coal
fuel
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 will see a rise at just over 30
quadrillion
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units
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. Nuclear, solar/wind and
hydropower
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 will
fuel
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 around 7, 6, and under 5 respectively. It can be seen that
hydropower
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 will stand at a stable amount from 2010 to 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, fuel, gas, hydropower, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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