Some people think that purchasing imported agricultural products has a positive effect. Others think consuming domestic products is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Technology has flourished by leaps and
bouds
in multifarious fields, especially Correct your spelling
bounds
agricultural
, and Replace the word
agriculture
as a result
, Linking Words
food
Use synonyms
products
are imported enormously as compared to the past. Some believe that buying other Use synonyms
countrie's
agricultural Change noun form
countries'
goods
Use synonyms
providing
more benefits, Wrong verb form
provides
while
others opine that Linking Words
people
should support their local farmer's Use synonyms
goods
Use synonyms
instead
of Linking Words
imported
. I agree with Correct pronoun usage
imported ones
a
latter opinion and Correct article usage
the
this
essay shall discuss it briefly for the following reasons.
On the one hand, Linking Words
people
should purchase their domestic Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
products
rather than foreign Use synonyms
goods
because they should be supported Use synonyms
to
their local farmers unlikely any corporate companies Change preposition
by
that
to make many profits Correct pronoun usage
apply
by
Change preposition
from
this
. Linking Words
For instance
, when the public consumes other Linking Words
nation's
Change noun form
nations'
food
stuffs Use synonyms
while
price of Linking Words
the
agricultural Correct article usage
apply
products
might Use synonyms
be risen
tremendously Wrong verb form
rise
due to
Linking Words
including
the imported tax and travel expenses. Verb problem
apply
In addition
, Linking Words
this
trend might Linking Words
be
continue in Unnecessary verb
apply
future
many farmers could be lost their employment Correct article usage
the future
along with
Linking Words
the
agricultural land will be Correct article usage
apply
substitued
by companies and enterprises, as an consequence, air pollution will be increased and some Correct your spelling
substituted
pesticites
will be Correct your spelling
pesticides
also
eliminated. Linking Words
Therefore
, consuming the local farmer's product might Linking Words
be helped
their livelihood development.
Wrong verb form
help
On the other hand
, importing Linking Words
food
Use synonyms
products
Use synonyms
bring
more positive effects to society. Many nations have unlimited resources to cultivate crops and Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
food
items but some nations do not have that Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
this
import system Linking Words
help
to fulfill their market demands. Change the verb form
helps
For example
, Linking Words
in
Taiwan is an Change preposition
apply
itensive
island with unlimited resources, Correct your spelling
intensive
extensive
they
import many crops to the USA to satisfy their market demands. Correct word choice
and they
Furthermore
, it will help to balance the Linking Words
food
supply around the world and every Use synonyms
Use synonyms
people
can get Fix the agreement mistake
person
food
equally without any Use synonyms
food
scarcity. Use synonyms
Therefore
, importing Linking Words
the
agricultural Correct article usage
apply
goods
Use synonyms
provide
Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
the
positive effect Correct article usage
a
to
society.
Change preposition
on
To conclude
, Linking Words
although
importing Linking Words
food
Use synonyms
products
can satisfy Use synonyms
to
other Change preposition
apply
countries
Change noun form
countries'
country's
food
Use synonyms
item's
demand Change noun form
needs
as well as
can be Linking Words
balanced
the Wrong verb form
balance
food
supply, Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
products price
can be increased by the import tax and travel Fix the agreement mistake
product prices
expense
Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
as well
Linking Words
as
Correct word choice
and
consuming
the local agricultural items might Replace the word
consumption
be improved
the local Wrong verb form
improve
farmer's
Change noun form
farmers'
livlihood
. Correct your spelling
livelihood
However
, I agree Linking Words
with
Change preposition
that
people
should consume their local agricultural Use synonyms
products
rather than imported Use synonyms
food
items.Use synonyms
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