The diagram below shows the process of cement manufacturing. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of cement manufacturing. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the process of cement manufacturing. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the procedure
of
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the production of
cement
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.
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, It involves a series of steps beginning from a
limestone
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quarry and terminating with
cement
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shipping. The process of
cement
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production begins with the excavation of
limestone
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from the quarry. The excavated
limestone
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is
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transferred to a dump truck and processed through a series of crushers with conveyor belts to create finely grounded
limestone
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, the finely grounded
limestone
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is moved to two
cylindrical shape
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tanks that contain sand and clay, respectively, to mix together in a grinding mill.
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,
mixture
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the mixture
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can be moved to a vertical preheater tower that contains three vertical tanks, after which it is transferred to the rotating heated tube (kiln).
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, the mixture is taken to the clinker cooler where the heat can be recycled to the preheated tower.
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, the clinker moves to a tank where gypsum is added before it is turned into a rotating tube for a proper blend.
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, the mixture is processed
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to the four
cement
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storage tanks and
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transported to the market in bulk quantities by trucks.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, limestone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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