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The table and chart below show the time spent at leisure and household activities. SUmmarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and chart below show the time spent at leisure and household activities. SUmmarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and chart illustrate the amount of time they
expend
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spend
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 on pastimes and household activities in England.
Overall
, TV, video and radio were the most
choosen
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chosen
 activities among people of all genders.
In addition
, the most significant difference was in the average
minutes
 per day of males and females enrolling in cooking and washing. As for the motion in free time, there are a few differences between guys and ladies. The daily minute allocation of men in entertainment facilities and sport are higher than that of women, at 15 and 4
minutes
, respectively. The time spent by both sexes pursuing reading is almost without distinction. Regarding other operations, the daily minute average in cooking &
washing
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and washing
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 recorded a much bigger percentage of both genders, with women
stood
Wrong verb form
standing
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 at about 75
minutes
, 45
minutes
 higher than men.
Similarly
, in shopping and clothes &
ironing
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and ironing
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, the lady counts were higher with about 35 and 30
minutes
,
while
 the guy counts were about 25 and 10
minutes
, respectively.
Conversely
, in repair, daily
minutes
 for
male
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males
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 was almost 20 compared to 10
minutes
 for
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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