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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
#town #canterbury #school #area #two #sites
The illustrated map shows the two possible sites of
school
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schools
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,
that
is
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are
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plainnig
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planning
planned
 to be built in the Canterbury.
Overall
, each of
two
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the two
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 places has its own pros and cons in comparison with another like location in
rural
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a rural
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 area or nearly to
housings
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housing
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.
S1
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The S1
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 area is located in the north-west of the Canterbury and placed just next to the housings. Because
of
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this
 point is near to
main
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the main
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 road, that goes to Sturry only five
kilometres
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kilometres,
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 it could be very comfortable
of
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for
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 its citizens to reach the school, driving to the south-west. But
on the other hand
, it would be difficult for the Chartham residents who will be forced to travel seven kilometres to north-east, despite that the town has less population.
S2
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The S2
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 area is located right in the
center
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centre
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 of Canterbury and approximately equally distanced
to
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from
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 both towns,
that
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which
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 would be comfortable to reach for all students.
Furthermore
, S2 is near
to
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all students, who live in
housings
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housing
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, but because
of
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it is not
the
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a
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 traffic
zone
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zone,
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 it will be complicated for parents to let down their children.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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