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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

#examinations #student #performance #coursework #projects
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It is argued that formal examinations are the better way to estimate
learners
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learners'
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 ability to demonstrate their
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 rather than coursework or continuous projects. In my opinion, it is important to provide
exams
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, but
such
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 type of assessment cannot be the only one. It is common for most
students
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 to be nervous during formal
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 because of
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 huge pressure of
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responsibility
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, there is not enough
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 for
students
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 to demonstrate all their
knowledge
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.
According to
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 these factors, formal examinations might be not the best way to estimate
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students
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knowledge
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.
Firstly
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, the format of
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 is
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quite strict
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 and is a reason for the anxiety. The process of examination is stressful for most
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students
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. If they are too stressed it might
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on
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their exam results.
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high school results of final
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 are essential for future enrollment into universities.
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, formal examinations might not be
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 effective
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 stress.
Secondly
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, most of
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exams
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the exams
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 are provided in a restricted period of
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.
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students
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 have a short
time
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 to prepare their answers and answer questions. The given
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 might not be enough to demonstrate
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the range of
knowledge
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.
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, during
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an average
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 school exam
students
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 have to choose one or two
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 and be prepared after less
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then
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 fifteen minutes.
Therefore
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, there is no
time
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 for a good
perfomance
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performance
. In conclusion, there is no one effective way to estimate
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learners'
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knowledge
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. Formal
eximanations
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examinations
 are good, but at the same
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time
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time,
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 they are combined with a lot of stress and lack of
time
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 to show
knowledge
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. Coursework or school
project
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projects
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,
on the other hand
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, can be less stressful and give
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plenty amount of
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 to demonstrate a variety of
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students
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students'
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knowledge
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 and skills, including
ability
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the ability
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 to present their work.
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coherence cohesion
While there is a recognisable structure to your essay, including an introduction and conclusion, more attention must be paid to connecting ideas and paragraphs with cohesive devices. Use transitional phrases and ensure that your ideas flow logically one from the other.
task achievement
Regarding task response, you have presented a basic position related to the question posed, but your argument could be strengthened by a more in-depth development of your ideas. Furthermore, illustrating your points with precise examples will significantly increase the strength of your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • standardized assessment
  • criteria
  • benchmark
  • performance comparison
  • evaluation under pressure
  • simulate
  • real-world scenarios
  • time management
  • comprehensive coverage
  • subject grasp
  • objectivity
  • lifelong learning
  • engagement
  • practical application
  • skill development
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • individualized feedback
  • student well-being
  • exam stress
  • academic environment
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