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The two maps show an island before and after the construction of tourist facilities.

The two maps show an island before and after the construction of tourist facilities.
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The maps show the developments, which took place after some changes in
illustrated
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the illustrated
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island
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.
Overall
Linking Words
, the comparison of
two
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the two
show examples
 maps reveals a change from an
unhibited
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uninhibited
 to
touristic
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a touristic
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 landscape. Before the
island
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 was much greener with a huge amount of trees there, but during the shifts the
island
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 experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is the building of the facilities all over the area
excepting
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except
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 the right
side
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, with
building
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apply
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the pear in the lower part of
an
Correct article usage
the
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island
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.
Linking Words
Moreover
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Moreover,
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 a new
touristic
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tourist
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 estate with huts sprang up around the
the
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apply
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trees
in
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on
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 the left
side
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 of the
island
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. Only a small place
in
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on
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 the right
side
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 of an area remained undeveloped. The central part of and
island
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make
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makes
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 way to the reception and restaurant, which have a path to the downside
to
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of
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pier
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the pier
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.
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 developments were the building of paths all over the recreational zone until the beach on the left
side
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 of the
island
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,
which
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apply
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became suitable for swimming.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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