The two maps show an island before and after the construction of tourist facilities.

The two maps show an island before and after the construction of tourist facilities.
The maps show the developments, which took place after some changes in
illustrated
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the illustrated
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island
.
Overall
, the comparison of
two
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the two
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maps reveals a change from an
unhibited
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uninhibited
to
touristic
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a touristic
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landscape. Before the
island
was much greener with a huge amount of trees there, but during the shifts the
island
experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is the building of the facilities all over the area
excepting
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the right
side
, with
building
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the pear in the lower part of
an
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the
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island
.
Moreover
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a new
touristic
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tourist
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estate with huts sprang up around the
the
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trees
in
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on
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the left
side
of the
island
. Only a small place
in
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on
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the right
side
of an area remained undeveloped. The central part of and
island
make
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makes
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way to the reception and restaurant, which have a path to the downside
to
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of
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pier
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the pier
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.
Further
developments were the building of paths all over the recreational zone until the beach on the left
side
of the
island
,
which
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became suitable for swimming.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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