I didn't have any nightmare travel experiences, but my friend has had such an experience.
I didn't have any nightmare travel experiences, but my
friend
has had such
an experience. She flew to Russia twice, to St. Petersburg. All these two times she flew with her mother and on business, they made various documents, tried to apply for citizenship in advance and got it done. When they flew there for the first time
, everything seemed to go well and they handed over all their personal data and documents and even had time
to rest. But when they flew for the second time
, everything didn’t go according to
plan. When they landed at St. Petersburg airport they were immediately detained by the police. My friend
was taken to some orphanage or shelter, and her mother was taken to the police. My friend
spent 2 days in a separate room with no windows, just a bed.The food was completely incomprehensible; no one knew what it was. The room was very small. My friend
said if she stayed there for a long time
, she would simply go crazy within these four walls. Finally
, after two days of suffering, tears and this
whole nightmare, her mother came and took her away. In the end, it turns out they were taken away because some strange error was found in the documents and they were wanted for a long time
. They could not be found because they left the country and were in Uzbekistan all this
time
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction, main body, and conclusion. The introduction should set the tone and topic, followed by orderly paragraphs with main points and transitions, and end with a conclusion summarizing the main ideas.
task achievement
Expand on the topic by including your own travel experiences or reflecting on the story told. Develop your main ideas with more depth and detail to provide a more complete response to the task.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite