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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the number of
visitors
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 in three categories of places in Europe
during
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from
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 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, mostly total of tourists
had
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apply
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increased over the
period
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 given; and
at the end
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, the highest can be seen on the coast,
conversely
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 to the mountains that
be
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are
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 the lowest, In the beginning,
quantity
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the quantity
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 of people who visited the coastal beach was high compared to the other site categories at 40,000;
however
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, in 1992, it gradually declined
about
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to about
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at
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350,000
visitors
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 and
then
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 significantly increased until
reach
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reached
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the
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a
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 peak
around
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of around
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 750.000 in the
last
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period
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 shown.
Comparing
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Compared
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 to the lowest
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 in the first
period
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 given, the lakes had had
visitors
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 just
on
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apply
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10,000, but significantly rose and reached the peak
about
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of about
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 70,000
tourist
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tourists
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 in 2002.
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, it fell down dramatically
at
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to
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 50,000 in 2007. On the other side, the mountains
was
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were
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 visited by 20,000 people during 1987.
Besides
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,
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this
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these
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 areas had
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a gradually
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gradually
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gradual
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 number of
visitors
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 over the
period
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 given and rose slowly until around 350,000
of
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apply
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tourists in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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