The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram explains the way in which
sugar
is produced by using sugar
cane.
Overall
, the process consists of seven different stages. It starts with growing the canes
and ends with drying the crystal sugar
particles.
First,
sugar
cane seeds start to grow from the ground. The growing stage takes at least twelve months and it may go up to eighteen months and then
they are harvested either automatically or manually. The manual method involves copping the canes
, while
the automatic method involves machines to cut the canes
. After that, sugar
canes
undergo the crushing machine which crushes the canes
and turns them into juice
. Acquired juice
, is subsequently
, purified by special filters called limestone.
In the next stage, purified juice
is put into the evaporator and heated to turn the juice
into syrup
. The syrup
, then
, undergo
a centrifuge which spins the Change the verb form
undergoes
syrup
in a convenient way in order to separate sugar
crystals from the syrup
. Finally
, eliminated sugar
crystals left in a tank for drying and cooling.Submitted by asik.melliss on
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