The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram explains the way in which
sugar
is produced by using Use synonyms
sugar
cane.
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Overall
, the process consists of seven different stages. It starts with growing the Linking Words
canes
and ends with drying the crystal Use synonyms
sugar
particles.
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First,
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sugar
cane seeds start to grow from the ground. The growing stage takes at least twelve months and it may go up to eighteen months and Use synonyms
then
they are harvested either automatically or manually. The manual method involves copping the Linking Words
canes
, Use synonyms
while
the automatic method involves machines to cut the Linking Words
canes
. After that, Use synonyms
sugar
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canes
undergo the crushing machine which crushes the Use synonyms
canes
and turns them into Use synonyms
juice
. Acquired Use synonyms
juice
, is Use synonyms
subsequently
, purified by special filters called limestone.
In the next stage, purified Linking Words
juice
is put into the evaporator and heated to turn the Use synonyms
juice
into Use synonyms
syrup
. The Use synonyms
syrup
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then
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undergo
a centrifuge which spins the Change the verb form
undergoes
syrup
in a convenient way in order to separate Use synonyms
sugar
crystals from the Use synonyms
syrup
. Use synonyms
Finally
, eliminated Linking Words
sugar
crystals left in a tank for drying and cooling.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes, juice, syrup with synonyms.
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