You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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the
modern era, some countries are trying to
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a legacy by successfully participating in different tournaments with good practice and other countries are focusing on providing
sports
facilities that each one can take advantage
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and
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I agree with
this
approach to developing sustainable and stable training methods.
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, if
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provides good
infrastructures
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to
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athletes
they
trained
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well,
they
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get proper nutrition and
helth
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health
care with better training equipment as
requuired
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required
for
there
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their
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sports
then
only they can
achive
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achieve
good
result
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results
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.
For instance
, the
goverment
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government
of China is
higly
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highly
supported
for
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this
idea and
as a result
, their contested
athletes
constantly
won
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multiple medals in
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tournament
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like
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the olympics
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olympics
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.
On the other hand
, the governments should fund more local
sports
centers
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to maintain healthy vibes among citizens. By making gyms, swimming pools, boxing, or gymnastics courses for kids the government opens the opportunity for its citizens to find new hobbies.
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, from
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they can gain new confidence.
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, India is now focusing
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new local
sport
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centers
from
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this
new
genrations
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generation
generations
is
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participating in
sports
.
Secondly
, it is clear the top-ranked players
deserves
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play where they can concentrate on the development of their skill and
also
new
athletes
can earn their experience from
well trained
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athletes
. In conclusion,
i
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think
sport
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centers
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bring a lot of benefits to different spheres of a country's life with confidence,
while
their citizens' health would be improved by local convenient fitness centres by
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participating
in local
sport
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centers
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Gym, swimming pool etc.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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