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The table illustrates the information of weekly distribution

The table illustrates the information of weekly distribution
The table illustrates the information
of
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on
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weekly
Add an article
the weekly
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 distribution of families
in
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particular
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a particular
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 country on the amount of
the
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apply
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revenue in the period
of
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from
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 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, the majority of the spending in 1968 was food
while
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 it was leisure in 2018 and the minority of the expense was fuel and power in two
of
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apply
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year
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years
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 1968 and 2018.
However
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, during the time of 2018, personal goods
was
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were
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 the least spending as well. Looking into more details, the highest amount belonged to food, xx% in 1968, but it decreased to xx in 2018. The number was followed by … housing // ……….. A significant decrease in spending on food over the 50-year period, but the cost of leisure, housing, and transport had significantly increased.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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