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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweight the disadvantages?

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In
this
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 contemporary epoch, the trend of studying abroad is surfacing day by day. The idea of attaining
education
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an education
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 from another country
provide
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students
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an
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 exposure to the world, but
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hand
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 learners have to leave their loved ones back home and face the universe all alone.
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 my perspective,
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the adavantages
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adavantages
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advantages
 of studying in
foreign
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a foreign
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 country
surpassed
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 its disadvantages. To commence with, studying overseas
assist
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 the individual in
overall
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 growth or development because scholars get a chance to face the world on their own.
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, they get to meet
students
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 from different countries who belong to distinct
background
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 and
culture
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cultures
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,
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further
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 provides them
an
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 opportunity to get
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 with them and learn
new
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 language.
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, in Quebec, Canada international
students
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 are able to learn
French
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the French
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 language because
government
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the government
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 of Quebec offers a free course and even gives financial allowance to the
students
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 who attend the program. Adding to
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, scholars are able to gain knowledge about other cultures and festivals. To illustrate, people in Canada celebrate Halloween but there is no
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 thing in India.
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, pursuing studies overseas will definitely broaden a person's horizon which is valuable,
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, he or she will get unforgettable impressions and memories.
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, all of these experiences help the individual to establish themselves. On the flip side, living alone in a foreign country gives a sense of loneliness and individuals often miss their families back home. If the student is
introvert
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, it becomes more challenging to get
involve
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 with new peers which can
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 affect their learning process. Specifically, living abroad is
bit
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 expensive and in order to manage expenses learners work part-time
that
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which
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 can
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 affect their study schedule.
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, all of these reasons make life hard for international
students
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.
To conclude
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, it can be inferred from the above confabulation that opting
studies
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 abroad is not a piece of cake, but all the hardships which
students
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 face will be worth it.
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, I believe that it is something which everybody should do to find their real self by overcoming the obstacles of foreign life.

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task achievement
Make sure to address both sides of the issue evenly and integrate specific examples to underscore each point clearly. The balance between advantages and disadvantages should be equitable, and examples should be not only relevant but also varied and illustrative of the point being made.
coherence cohesion
Construct clear paragraphs with topic sentences that directly relate to the prompt. Use a variety of cohesive devices and clear logical connectors to create a seamless flow. While there's evidence of structure, occasional repetition of ideas or excessive reliance on simple connecting words may affect clarity.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cross-cultural competency
  • global perspective
  • academic enrichment
  • linguistic proficiency
  • professional networking
  • self-reliance
  • multicultural environment
  • cultural assimilation
  • financial burden
  • scholarship opportunities
  • academic credit transfer
  • personal adversity
  • socioeconomic disparity
  • cultural nuances
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