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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line chart indicates the population of
foreigner
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foreign
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 tourists in various regions in a European country, including the
coast
, mountains and
the
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lakes between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
, the
number
 of people who visit
surveyed
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the surveyed
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 nation indicated an upward trend,
however
, the data
of
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on
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 the lakes displayed a drastic drop in the
last
 surveyed period.
On the other hand
, the
coast
 was the most favoured tourist spot for people from other nations,
while
 only a few
of
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individuals went to mountain areas. The
number
 of people from overseas to the lakes underwent a surge from 10
thousand
 to over 70
thousand
 between 1987 and 2002, surpassing those who
been
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had been
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 to the
coast
.
However
, the figure dropped
20
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by 20
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thousand
 within 5 years since 2002, at 50
thousand
 in 2007. The
coast
 was the most popular place, the
number
 accounted for the largest proportion of
foreigners
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foreign
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 visitors,
in
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which the figure experienced a consistent
grow
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growth
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 between 1992 and 2007 from nearly 40
thousand
 to over 70
thousand
, compared to the mountains, which
was
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were
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 the least
famouse
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famous
 placed in
surveyd
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surveyed
surveys
survey
 nation,
despit
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despite
 an incremental population during surveyed years, the
higgest
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highest
biggest
number
 was no more than 40
thousand
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, number, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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