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Do you believe that self-driving cars will become common in the near future? Why or why not? Support your answer with reasons and expamles from your own knowledge or experiencTe.

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These days, an autonomous
car
 is quite popular around the world and many manufacturing companies have started to the self-driving vehicles.
However
, I do not believe that
this
 kind of
cars
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 will
not
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become common in upcoming
future
.
This
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 essay, I will explain why I do not believe
this
 statement and provide examples to support my position.
To begin
 with, an electric
car
 can cause more road accidents
due to
this
 type of
cars
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car
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are
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is
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 designed by programs and algorithms.
This
 is because
of
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this
 kind of vehicle cannot
take
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make
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decision
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decisions
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by
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on
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own
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its own
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 when any road accidents might
be occurred
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occur
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.
For example
, if an automatic
car
 turns left it might be hitted on
tree
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the tree
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, if turn right it might hit people who
walks
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 in
pathway
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the pathway
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 because it does work only by programs and it does not take
own
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its own
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 decision. These are the
reason
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reasons
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 for I believe that
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driver-less
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driverless
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cars
 will not become common in the near
future
.
Furthermore
,
the
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self-driving transportation
price
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prices
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 are expensive as compared to
the
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apply
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traditional vehicles.
This
 is because
of
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people do not like to buy
this
 kind of transportation
in
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apply
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now
in
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the same situation will
be happened
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happen
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 in
future
 too, and
as a result
,
future
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the future
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 generation might not be interested to purchase in the driver-less
cars
indeed
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apply
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.
For instance
, the Tesla automatic
car
price
 is $ 75000 but the normal vehicle
price
 is just $10000. The population should consider the
car
price
.
Therefore
, I do not believe that
the
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apply
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autonomous
cars
 will become popular in
near
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the near
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future
.
To conclude
,
the
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apply
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driver-less
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driverless
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cars
 are famous
among
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in
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world
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the world
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. Even though, it will not become common on
road
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the road
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 in the near
future
 because
it
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its
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price
 is more expensive
as well
as
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and
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 accidents might
be occurred
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occur
have occurred
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.
Therefore
, I do not believe that
the
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apply
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autonomus
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autonomous
cars
 will not become common in
near
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the near
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future
.
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