he table reprisents how much was the pilice budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain and where that many came from and charts give information how it was used.

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table and two pie charts compare the financial sources of police in two sequential years 2017 and 2018 in a specific region of Britain. The table illustrates the source of money and both pie graphs give details regarding how the budget was used.

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, it is evident that the total amount of

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increased in 2018 versus 2017.

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salaries allocated the highest amount of money distribution, they were reduced in 2018.

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the table, the national government provided the greatest share of

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organization’s finances which went up from 175.5 to 177.8

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period.

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, police authorities achieved 91.2

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pounds of their economic aid from local taxes.

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as grants, brought only a small of the total budget and it changed slightly to 38.5

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pounds in 2018.

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, there are three main ways of spending money, officers and staff incomes were the biggest part with 75% and 69% in 2017 and 2018, respectively. Building and transport had the same allocation of costs with 17% in both years. Eventually,

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government section spent 14% versus 8% of its budget on technology.

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