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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.
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The given diagram illustrates the percentage of the total world
population
 in
India
,
China
,
USA
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the USA
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 and
Japan
 from 1950 to 2002 and
predicted
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the predicted
show examples
 amount for 2050.
Overall
, it can be seen that the most
distribution
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distributed
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 country
of
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apply
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population
 is
China
, followed by
India
whereas
USA
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the USA
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 and
Japan
 had the
lessest
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least
 contribution among
four
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the four
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 countries. In
comparsion
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comparison
,
China
 and
Japan
 show a
down trend
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downtrend
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while
India
 experiences an upward trend.
To begin
 with,
China
 had the highest
population
started
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starting
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from1950
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from 1950
 at around 23%,
however
, it slightly decreased to 20% and
estimated
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is estimated
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fall
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to fall
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into
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to
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 15% in 2050.
Similary
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Similarly
,
Japan
also
 showed a downward tendency from 4% in 1950 and predicted
dropped
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a drop
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into
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to
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 1%
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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.
On the other hand
,
India
's
population
 has
a
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an
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 up
going
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apply
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trend with 15% in the beginning and
forecated
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the forecast
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 increased by 4% to
near
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nearly
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 20%.
Moreover
,
population
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the population
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 of
USA
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the USA
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 was around 6% at
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the started
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started
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start
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 but declined to 5% in 2002 and remained unchanged
of
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from
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 the prediction
in
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for
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 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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