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Band 2.5

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problem, as well as practical problems To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Introduction
Communication in a
non native
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language
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 for people who
staying
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 overseas
have
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impact
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an impact
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to
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on
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social
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the social
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 matter as same as training issues. I strongly agree
language
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 barrier
always
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main
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a main
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 reason people can not interact in society where they living in other
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.
Body paragraph 1
Firsty
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First
Firstly
 and foremost, the vast majority of pupils
less
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 understanding in the second
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 conversation.
This
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 is mostly
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 the fact that
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 brain has limits,
capability
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and capability
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 and need experience in
long
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the long
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 run to make a good dialogue as fluently as their first
language
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.
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,
person
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the person
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 who never
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 abroad
have
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 trouble
to talk
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 like
their
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they're
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 practicing in
classroom
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the classroom
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.
This
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mean
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language
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 adaptation in a range
certain
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of certain
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time
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times
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 will
covered
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 the missing
holw
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how
hole
 in the way
human
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humans
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 speak.
Body paragraph 2
Furthermore
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, international life has
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condition
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conditions
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such
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 as culture,
politic
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politics
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,
norm
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norms
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 and
life style
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lifestyle
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.
Those distingush
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 can not
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.
As a result
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,
human
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the human
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 body
need
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adjustment
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in
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to
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 the new social environment to get involved
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hence
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get
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improve gradually.
Body paragraph 3
Finally
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, living
together
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with
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in
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community
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the community
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 where they come from the same place is the solution to
keep
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 in touch in public.
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,
their
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they
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 will not have new knowledge as fast as they in new habitat.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
language
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barrier
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barriers
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 cause miss leading between
two way
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two-way
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communicator
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communicators
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 that
get
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impact
to
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apply
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social life.

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introduction conclusion present
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion which are essential components of IELTS Writing Task 2. Ensure that your introduction paraphrases the question, states your position, and outlines the main points of your essay. Your conclusion should summarise your main points and restate your position clearly.
logical structure
The essay has significant issues with logical structure and coherence. The ideas presented are not well-ordered, and the paragraphs lack clear topic sentences. Try to organise your essay into clear paragraphs, each beginning with a topic sentence that outlines the main idea of the paragraph. Ensure that each subsequent sentence in the paragraph supports this main idea.
supported main points
The main points were not strongly supported by specific examples or arguments. Whenever you make a point, back it up with clear examples or explanations. Use the PEEL structure (Point, Explain, Example, Link) to develop your paragraphs effectively.
complete response
The essay does not completely address the task. Ensure that you fully respond to all parts of the question. This includes discussing the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement, providing arguments to support your position, and offering examples where appropriate.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ideas and concepts in your essay were not always clearly and comprehensively presented. Work on expressing your thoughts more clearly and avoid overly complex or confusing sentence constructions. Remember to define your key terms and concepts to ensure the examiner understands your arguments.
relevant specific examples
The use of relevant and specific examples to support points was limited. Draw on a wider range of examples and ensure they are directly relevant to the topic and your argument. These examples should illustrate your points in a way that reinforces your arguments.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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