The table below shows the changes in exports in HK billions between 2009 and 2010.
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of
change in percentages for five items Change preposition
on
were
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Clothes
, Manufacturing and Metals exports in HK billions from 2009 to 2010.
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Overall
, the percentage of Linking Words
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export
was Fix the agreement mistake
exports
more
in 2010 than previous Correct word choice
higher
year
. Use synonyms
However
, metals Linking Words
was
the Change the verb form
were
maine
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main
Maine
export
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throuoght
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through
throughout
period
, Correct article usage
the period
while
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clothes
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was
the Change the verb form
were
lest
item of Correct your spelling
least
export
.
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It is clear that
the total purchase ratio in 2009 was 32%. Linking Words
While
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incresed
by 6% in next Correct your spelling
increased
year
.
Equipment was Use synonyms
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in the
the
similar range with profit Correct article usage
a
incresed
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increased
1.3
%. Change preposition
by 1.3
In contrast
, telecommunication has a significant difference through a Linking Words
year
by 4.8 and it changes Use synonyms
achieve
61% of Add the particle
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export
. To comparing between Use synonyms
clothes
and manufacturing in 2009 they Use synonyms
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clothes
6% and 5.5% other, next Use synonyms
year
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decreasedUse synonyms
1
% Change preposition
by 1
while
1.5 in 2010. As you see metals were the significant change percent was 122% in 2009 and 2010 Linking Words
were
2.3 and 5.1 respectively.Unnecessary verb
apply
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