The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The first chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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the
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apply
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information about how many Japanese have had
burning
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a burning
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desire
for travelling
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to travel
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overseas over a period of 10 years from 1985 to 1995.the second line graph highlighted the number of Japanese
which
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who
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would prefer aurorally as their destination. all in
all
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all,
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what deduce from
first
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chart is that Japan's population as time goes have more intention to
tripe
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trip
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exotic
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to exotic
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countries and
this
desire is on the sore trend.
On the other hand
, Australia
have
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has
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become more prevalent among these people and
have
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has
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witnessed an incremental trend in
given
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period of time. If we catch a glimpse
to
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of
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above
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the above
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graph, we can be informed that from 1985 to 1990 jalopies tourists travelling aboard have seen a strikingly sore so that stepped up from 5
million
to around 11
million
. in accordance with
this
trend
the
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apply
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Australia's share
from
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of
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this
number
have
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has
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rocketed from 2
million
in 1985 to 5
million
in 1989.to the respect given chart, in 1991
this
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statistics have in fronted by a
slightly
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slight
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decrease with 10
million
.
Comparatively
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a dramatic but provisional drop accrue in second figures in 1989 with 4
million
. After 1991 the number of passengers
which
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who
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journey to exotic
country come
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countries
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across temperately
rise
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rose
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and in 1995
reach
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reached
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a climax
an
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and
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touch
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touched
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a peak with 15
million
.on
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On
other
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the other
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end of
spectrum
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the spectrum
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, the jalopies visitors from Australia
have
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has
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encountered
with
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apply
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a substantial surge from just over 4
million
to above 6
million
between 1989 and 1994 and
finally
there is a fairly decline to 6
million
in 1995.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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