Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money.  Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days
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argue that
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is expensive and a waste of
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some
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believe that
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is valuable, exploration and entertainment
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others think that
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means more
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and is invaluable. In
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essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my conclusion. In terms of benefits going to another
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or city for exploring and entertainment are benefits to increase your knowledge in
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you want to know about their culture
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, we can through travel to cultural exchange
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, there are some countries
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they are affordable prices, some countries have tourist attractions they get cheap
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the drawbacks about
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are some
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think that save
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for your life
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as freelancers and your family
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that. the main reason given to support
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is that travel gives us more rest and cultural exchange, and get more knowledge about others if my
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is desert it would be worth
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to Europe
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I will explore the nature. To illustrate, I live in a desert
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and there was an article in NSA magazine that the majority of
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would travel to another
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not just for fun because their
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is in the summer they want to travel to a place that has cold weather far away from home.
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,
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doesn’t mean a waste of
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or for entertainment. In conclusion,
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people
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argue about
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for
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that doesn’t make sense,
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makes a fun, relaxing, enjoyable experience.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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