The charts below show changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one conutry between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one conutry between 1920 and 2019.
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The charts illustrate the percentage of domestic residents with
electrorical
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electrical
uses and
its
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number of
hours
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spent per
week
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from 1920 to 2019. Washing
Machine
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Machines
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,
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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are some of the machinery appliances used in
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a household
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household
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households
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.
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, the usage of electrical appliances in
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household
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households
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depicts a significant rise between 1920 and 2019 especially for
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refrigerator
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. Meanwhile, the amount of time
used
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in
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housework per
week
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per
household
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had
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declined vividly from 1920 to 2019. The contrast data showed between 2 charts.
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Refrigerator
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started as the least utilized product in 1920
while
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vacuum
cleaner
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and washing
machine
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machines
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were nearly
in
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the same starting point with only
10
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percent
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difference by 1920.
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Refrigerator
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reached the top used electrical appliances in
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household
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households
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in 2019 with 100 percent even though
it
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started
in
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the bottom list. Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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followed
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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as the most used items in 2000 by 100
percentage
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appliance
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appliances
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. Washing
machine
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machines
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experienced slight changes from 1920 to 2019 and positioned
in
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75 percent usage in 2019.
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of
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of housework had slumped between 1920 and 2019. In 1920 it was stated that 50
hours
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spent
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were spent
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per
week
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while
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in 2019 only 10
hours
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per
week
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per
household
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, refrigerator, household with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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