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The table shows the percentage of the rooms occupied in six hotels during May to September between 1985 and 2000. The table also indicates the star rating of each hotel.

The table shows the percentage of the rooms occupied in six hotels during May to September between 1985 and 2000. The table also indicates the star rating of each hotel.
The table shows the
percentage
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 of rooms occupied in six
hotels
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 from May until September. The data is taken between 1985 to 2000 at 5-year intervals. A star rating of each
hotel
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 is
also
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 included.
Overall
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, there are
two
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 5
-star
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hotels
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, one 4
-star
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 and three 3
-star
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. Hampton's and
Hamilton
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's are the top
two
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hotels
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 throughout the four
years
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 shown on the table,
while
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HotelConcorde
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 holds the lowest
percentage
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 of occupied rooms in 1995. We'll begin with the first
two
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years
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 of 1985 and 1990. As mentioned above, Hampton's, a 3
-star
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hotel
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, and
Hamilton
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's, a 5
-star
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hotel
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, top the occupied
percentage
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 for both
years
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, standing tall at 100% for both
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. Following we have
Hotel
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 Olivia, a 3
-star
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hotel
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, and
HotelConcorde
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, a five
-star
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hotel
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 with both
hotels
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 having 90% of their rooms filled in 1985. In 1990
HotelConcorde
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percentage
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 remained steady
while
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Hotel
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 Olivia’s dropped by 5%.
Finally
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, we have The Continental, a 3
-star
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hotel
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, and The Tower, a 4
-star
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hotel
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. In 1985, the percentages were 79% and 57% meanwhile in 1990, they changed to 83% and 85% respectively. Moving on to the
last
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two
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years
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 1995 and 2000. Hampton's and
Hamilton
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's are still standing strong with 90% and 95% in 1995 respectively. In 2000,
Hamilton
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's
percentage
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 dropped by 25%
while
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Hamilton
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's increased to maximum capacity.
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, during 1995, we had The Continental and
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 Olivia, which stood at 70% and 89% respectively, increasing by 6% for
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 Olivia and 10% for The Continental in the next 5
years
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.
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,
HotelConcorde
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 and The Tower clocks in at the bottom as during 1995 they had 30% and 55% respectively.
This
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 changed to 66% and 85% in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, hotels, hotel, two, -star, hamilton, years, hotelconcorde with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 3 times.
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