The table shows the percentage of the rooms occupied in six hotels during May to September between 1985 and 2000. The table also indicates the star rating of each hotel.

The table shows the percentage of the rooms occupied in six hotels during May to September between 1985 and 2000. The table also indicates the star rating of each hotel.
The table shows the
percentage
of rooms occupied in six
hotels
from May until September. The data is taken between 1985 to 2000 at 5-year intervals. A star rating of each
hotel
is
also
included.
Overall
, there are
two
5
-star
hotels
, one 4
-star
and three 3
-star
. Hampton's and
Hamilton
's are the top
two
hotels
throughout the four
years
shown on the table,
while
HotelConcorde
holds the lowest
percentage
of occupied rooms in 1995. We'll begin with the first
two
years
of 1985 and 1990. As mentioned above, Hampton's, a 3
-star
hotel
, and
Hamilton
's, a 5
-star
hotel
, top the occupied
percentage
for both
years
, standing tall at 100% for both
hotels
. Following we have
Hotel
Olivia, a 3
-star
hotel
, and
HotelConcorde
, a five
-star
hotel
with both
hotels
having 90% of their rooms filled in 1985. In 1990
HotelConcorde
percentage
remained steady
while
Hotel
Olivia’s dropped by 5%.
Finally
, we have The Continental, a 3
-star
hotel
, and The Tower, a 4
-star
hotel
. In 1985, the percentages were 79% and 57% meanwhile in 1990, they changed to 83% and 85% respectively. Moving on to the
last
two
years
1995 and 2000. Hampton's and
Hamilton
's are still standing strong with 90% and 95% in 1995 respectively. In 2000,
Hamilton
's
percentage
dropped by 25%
while
Hamilton
's increased to maximum capacity.
Then
, during 1995, we had The Continental and
Hotel
Olivia, which stood at 70% and 89% respectively, increasing by 6% for
Hotel
Olivia and 10% for The Continental in the next 5
years
.
Finally
,
HotelConcorde
and The Tower clocks in at the bottom as during 1995 they had 30% and 55% respectively.
This
changed to 66% and 85% in 2000.
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