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Students are asked to work short time without pay as a part of their education. Is this more of an advantage or a disadvantage to student and company ?

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Students are required to engage in unpaid short-term work as part of their educational curriculum.I believe that it is more of an advantage because it will be like a lesson for yourself and over time you will get used to it. The main advantage
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 conduct free lessons on your education for a short time.
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 helps your own experience and you get used to working in your field, despite the fact that it is a free part-time job.
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, when you are not sure that you have chosen the wrong profession or are simply embarrassed to express your opinion, practice is one of the best ways to show yourself. In
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 it is
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 for closed people. On the one hand, working part-time for loose within the framework of a university or company is
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 a disadvantage. Not all students support
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in their field.
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, some do not like their profession because they entered into it because their parents wanted it and they do not plan to do so in the future continue your work in
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 direction. In conclusion, engaging in unpaid part-time work for a brief period as part of one's education can adapt an individual to the industry, but it may
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 result in a reluctance to pursue a career in that field.

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introduction conclusion present
The essay needs a clear introduction that presents the topic and directly addresses the question of whether unpaid work is more of an advantage or disadvantage. The conclusion should effectively summarize the points made without introducing new ideas.
logical structure
The essay should follow a logical structure with well-structured paragraphs, each starting with a clear topic sentence. It's essential to use a range of cohesive devices to make clear connections between ideas.
clear comprehensive ideas
The ideas could be clearer and more comprehensively developed. Each paragraph should center around one main idea, which should be supported by specific examples or further explanation.
relevant specific examples
Specific examples are needed to substantiate the points being made. This includes referencing studies, citing credible sources, or providing relevant anecdotes that directly relate to the student and company experience.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • internship
  • practical experience
  • hands-on learning
  • professional skills
  • networking opportunities
  • workplace environment
  • industry knowledge
  • resume
  • career prospects
  • financial burden
  • exploitation
  • cheap labor
  • ethical concerns
  • labor laws
  • fair compensation
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