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The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that countries should allocate
fundings
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all
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 individuals, even those who
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 not work.
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 essay completely agrees that each citizen should be paid by governments.
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, there will be a notable increase among high-qualified professionals, as the poor would have
ability
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 to pay for education.
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, the number of suicides would decrease.
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 with, having an additional income source from the government
,
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 seems advantageous for poor families. They might use
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 for their children’s higher education, especially those who are not able to afford overpriced schooling.
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, one in four Africans
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 not have a bachelor’s degree, which seems priceless
for
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 them.
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, giving
money
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 would raise people’s emotional state.
It
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 other words, people are feeling frustrated as they must work
12 hours
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12-hour
shift
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, except
those
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 who have to work
night
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 shift as well,
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 produces their insecurities, and some of them are covered in debt, which leads to suicide. If national authorities give them
money
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, they will not have
lack
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 of
money
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.
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, they will have time for family gatherings without thinking of needs.
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, Finland
have
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 been providing
money
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 for all citizens for 2 years, as the results, the Times showed that they are on the top of the happiest countries in the world. In conclusion, I totally agree that citizens should be provided
money
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 because it will be a huge benefit for countries,
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, there will be
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professional development. And the fact,
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 would reduce the number of suicides, which people commit.

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Introduction and Conclusion
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Logical Structure
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Supported Main Points
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Complete Response
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Clear and Comprehensive Ideas
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Relevant Specific Examples
Use specific examples that are directly relevant to your arguments to strengthen your essay. Ensure that these examples are detailed and clearly linked to the point you are making.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic income
  • financial security
  • unemployed
  • poverty
  • support
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • taxes
  • budgetary strain
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