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In many cities, the population is encouraged to use public transportation rather than private transport In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of using public transport?

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increased more tremendously than ever before
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 the innovation of the technology.
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, in many towns, people are motivated to use
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public
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 of private vehicles. There are plenty of benefits and drawbacks
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public transport.
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public
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 rather than private vehicles. One of the main benefits is that air pollution can be mitigated enormously when people
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public
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fewer public motors on the road
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it
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can release
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 lower amount of emissions than more private
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 fumes. Another advantage is that congestion might be reduced in towns and cities when the population have to use
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public
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 of their own vehicles.
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,
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city roads
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 may be free, so people are able to reach
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destination
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destinations
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online without
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getting stuck in
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 traffic
jam
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. There are some disadvantages of
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peak hours,
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, working commuters and school children must
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public
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 and they cannot reach their exact destination
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ontime
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time
. Another disadvantage is that timing of the public
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 may not suitable for everyone
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 the large population.
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, everyone wants to travel
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 different times for different
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,
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, they have to wait more hours to get
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public
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 has benefits and drawbacks. Reducing the air pollution and traffic problem in cities and towns are the advantages.
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, timing is not suitable for everyone
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rush hours are the disadvantages of
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task achievement
Your essay presents a basic response to the task, but the purpose of the essay could be articulated more clearly. Ensure that your introduction clearly addresses the question and provides a preview of the points to be discussed. Additionally, it is important to fully develop your ideas with specific examples and explanations to fully meet the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay could be improved. While there are some linking words, paragraph usage could be enhanced to more clearly separate points and ideas. Aim to construct paragraphs with a clear main idea, supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence that summarises and connects back to the essay's main argument. This will enhance the overall coherence and cohesion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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