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The pie charts shows the changes in anual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

The pie charts shows the changes in anual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
The three pie charts represent the changes in every-
year
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 spending by a particular
school
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 in the UK in 1981, 1999, and 2001.
Overall
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, it can be noted that the
school
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 spent the least on insurance
while
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 spending the most on teacher’s
salaries
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.
Furthermore
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, spending on other workers'
salaries
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 and resources went down. With regards to insurance, the
school
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 spent 2% on it in 1991, and it increased slightly to 3% in the next 10 years. In 2001, the
school
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 increased its spending in
this
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 category by 5%.
Similarly
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, spending on teachers'
salaries
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 climbed from 40% in the first
year
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 to 50% in the second
year
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;
however
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, in the final
year
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, it dropped by 5%.
Likewise
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, spending on furniture and equipment increased from 15% in the first
year
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 to less than a quarter (23%) in 2001.
On the other hand
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, in the case of other workers'
salaries
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, the
school
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 spent 28% on them, and after a decade, it declined to around a fifth (22%) and reached 15% in the
last
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year
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. In terms of resources
such
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 as books, the
school
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 spent 15% on them in 1981.
Although
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 its rate increased to 20% in 1991, it went down dramatically in 2001 to 9%

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, salaries, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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