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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

#internet #people #platform #believe #books
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In modern times, there are a
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 of opportunities to
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 online. The
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 websites suggest a variety of
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 materials that are very easy and convenient to
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. It is argued that
people
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internet
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instead
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 of
books
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.
This
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, the quality of
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 the
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 is not always good
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enough
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Secondly
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, there are a
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 of
peolple
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people
 who still prefer to buy
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 in a bookstore.
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there
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a
lot
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 of useful and interesting
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 can be used through the
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, not all of
this
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information
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 is acceptable for
study
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 purposes. These days there are a
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 of
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 learning platforms that
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 by
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universities. Materials on
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, it is often when lots of small
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authors
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information
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 original meaning and even become incorrect for
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, it is always better to check the
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 it. In spite of
popularity
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the popularity
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 of the
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, bookstores and libraries are still used to get
books
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. There are a
lot
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 of
people
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 who prefer to buy
books
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 for themselves or as a present for somebody. Hardwear
books
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 are popular
as well as
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books
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.
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 of
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books
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 prepared by specialist and have
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very high quality.
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, for some
people
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 using a
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physical
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that
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than
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internet
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,
for example
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. In conclusion, despite
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popularuty
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popularity
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, there are a
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 of
people
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 still using
books
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 to learn. In my opinion,
books
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 cannot be replaced by the
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, because
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 are
more
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 reliable source of
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 for
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and structured presentation of your arguments throughout the essay. Use a variety of linking words appropriately and carefully organize paragraphs.
task achievement
Work on developing your ideas more fully with detailed examples to support your main points. Focus on the depth as well as the breadth of the content covered.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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