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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries for UK residents to visit

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries for UK residents to visit
#information #travel #uk #bar #countries #residents #visit
The charts presented the
amount
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number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 either from
UK
 residents abroad or
otherwise
, overseas residents who
traveled
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travelled
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 to
UK
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the UK
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 over the years.
On the other hand
, the bar charts
gives
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give
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the
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apply
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information about
countries
 that appeared to be most visited by
the
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apply
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UK
 citizens.
Overall
, both
trip
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trips
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which
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apply
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taken by the people of
UK
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the UK
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 and
foreigner
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foreigners
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are
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have
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increasing
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increased
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 throughout the years, from the period of 1979 to 1999.
However
, there
were
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was
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higher
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a higher
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amount
 of outlanders who came to
UK
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the UK
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 and it reached
it
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its
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 peak in 1999
by
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with
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 over 50
millions
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million
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 people. Meanwhile, the
UK
also
 got the highest
amount
 of natives who went overseas in the same year
for
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apply
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almost 30
millions
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million
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 people.
Nevertheless
,
UK
residents
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resident's
residents'
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 most traveled
country
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countries
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both
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apply
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are in Europe, with France being the first and Spain following behind.
Countries
 like
USA
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the USA
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,
Greek
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Greece
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, and Turkey, have a moderate
amount
 of travelers from the
UK
.
Hence
, the differences between European
countries
 that had been visited by the
UK
residences
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residents
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 with other
countries
 showed a quite big gap.
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