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You have recently moved to a different city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you decided to move to a different city Describe the new city and accommodation Ask your friend to arrange a visit

#city #friend #move #accommodation #visit
Hi Dilay, How is going on ? I'm just writing to let you know that
i
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 got
great
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a great
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 vacancy opportunity in
Manchester
last
 month and
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 confirmed it! When you came to London
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 mentioned you before. It is my dream job
which
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i
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 can contribute
too
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many skills to my professional
carrier
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career
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.
Last
 week I left
from
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London and moved to
Manchester
. I rented a little flat in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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. In
Manchester
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Manchester,
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 flat rents are cheaper than
London
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in London
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. I pay only 900 £ for a month and bills are included. Can you believe it! There are two big football
team
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in
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here ;
Manchester
 United and
Manchester
 City. My home is very close to Old Trafford so
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 will watch
Manchester
 United's game tomorrow. Another advantage of
this
 city is transportation. You can access wherever you want with
tram
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 and it takes
maximum
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a maximum
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20
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of 20
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 minutes. Why don't you come here next Saturday ? I've reserved two
table
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tables
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 for us in Quick China restaurant. I
hope
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 forward to catching up with you soon. Best Regards, Merve
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coherence cohesion
The paragraphing needs some work; each new idea should start a new paragraph to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
A more consistent use of linking devices would improve the logical flow of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a proper greeting and sign-off to meet the criteria of the exam.
task achievement
Expand on the reasons for your move, as the task requires a full explanation.
task achievement
Use a tone that is consistently appropriate for a letter to a friend; the current tone is somewhat formal at times.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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