Governments are prohibiting underage children from getting full time jobs in certain countries. Do you agree or disagree?
Child
labour are
banned by the authorities in several destinations Change the verb form
is
as
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for
full
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full-time
time
worker
because it destroys the
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apply
child
development. I completely agree with this
statement. There are some reasons behingd
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behind
this
phenomenon. This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
with, the government
should not allow Correct pronoun usage
them to
to
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apply
the
teenagers Correct article usage
apply
work
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to work
in
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apply
full
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full-time
time
because many teens have a chance to give up their studies without completing
. To be more precise, Correct pronoun usage
completing them
full
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full-time
time
work
means 8 hours job, if child
works Correct article usage
a child
the
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a
full
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full-time
time
job he should work
8 hours like adult
, Add an article
an adult
consequently
, he cannot have a chance to attend school, so he might be dropped his education and does full
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full-time
time
work
. For example
, Indian
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the Indian
government
is
banned Verb problem
has
child
labour are
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apply
worked
full Wrong verb form
working
time
and they have a strict rules
against who breaks the law to appoint Correct the article-noun agreement
strict rules
a strict rule
child
as a Correct article usage
a child
full
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full-time
time
worker
in companies. Hence
, the authority prohibits the
under-age labour are Correct article usage
apply
worked
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working
the
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apply
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
employment.
Furthermore
, many small enterprises are
appointed Unnecessary verb
apply
the
teens are Correct article usage
apply
the
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apply
full
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full-time
time
worker
illegally in black markets while
they provide a low amount of salary as
compared to Change preposition
apply
the
adult workers, so, the Correct article usage
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government
are banning the child
work
as full
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full-time
time
worker
. Similarly
, children do not have the
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work
medical insurance until they are adult
. Fix the agreement mistake
adults
For instance
, if any accidents are happened
in the Change to the active voice
happen
have happened
working place
, teens do not have Correct your spelling
workplace
the
insurance to cover Correct article usage
apply
this
expenses and the company Correct determiner usage
these
do
not provide anything. Correct subject-verb agreement
does
Therefore
, the government
does not allow children work
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to work
the
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apply
full
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full-time
time
job
.
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jobs
To conclude
, the government
are forbiding
underage Correct your spelling
forbidding
child
getting Fix the agreement mistake
children from
the
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apply
full
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full-time
time
employment due to
children have to drop out their
school education without finishing high school and they do not have Change preposition
of their
work
insurance to cover any accidents are happened
. I hope Wrong verb form
happen
this
drive brings more benefits to teenagers.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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