Governments are prohibiting underage children from getting full time jobs in certain countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Child
labour
are
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banned by the authorities in several destinations
as
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for
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full
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full-time
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time
worker
because it destroys
the
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child
development. I completely agree with
this
statement. There are some reasons
behingd
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behind
this
phenomenon.
This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
To begin
with, the
government
should not allow
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them to
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to
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the
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teenagers
work
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to work
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in
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apply
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full
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full-time
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time
because many teens have a chance to give up their studies without
completing
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completing them
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. To be more precise,
full
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full-time
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time
work
means 8 hours job, if
child
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a child
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works
the
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a
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full
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full-time
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time
job he should
work
8 hours like
adult
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an adult
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,
consequently
, he cannot have a chance to attend school, so he might be dropped his education and does
full
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full-time
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time
work
.
For example
,
Indian
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the Indian
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government
is
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banned
child
labour
are
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worked
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working
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full
time
and they have
a strict rules
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strict rules
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against who breaks the law to appoint
child
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a child
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as a
full
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full-time
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time
worker
in companies.
Hence
, the authority prohibits
the
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under-age labour are
worked
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working
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the
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full
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full-time
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time
employment.
Furthermore
, many small enterprises
are
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appointed
the
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teens are
the
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full
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full-time
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time
worker
illegally in black markets
while
they provide a low amount of salary
as
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compared to
the
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adult workers, so, the
government
are banning the
child
work
as
full
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full-time
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time
worker
.
Similarly
, children do not have
the
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work
medical insurance until they are
adult
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adults
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.
For instance
, if any accidents
are happened
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happen
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in the
working place
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workplace
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, teens do not have
the
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insurance to cover
this
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these
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expenses and the company
do
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does
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not provide anything.
Therefore
, the
government
does not allow children
work
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to work
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the
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apply
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full
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full-time
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time
job
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jobs
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.
To conclude
, the
government
are
forbiding
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forbidding
underage
child
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children from
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getting
the
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full
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full-time
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time
employment
due to
children have to drop out
their
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of their
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school education without finishing high school and they do not have
work
insurance to cover any accidents are
happened
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happen
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. I hope
this
drive brings more benefits to teenagers.
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