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Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed rather than to work for a company or organization. Why it might be the case? What could be the disadvantages if being self-employed?

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There is no doubt that these days you should have many sources of money the question is what the pros and cons
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 you have two choices to be an employed or freelancer, in
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you have your own business that makes you gain more money , To illustrate when you invest your time and your knowledge and put all your power into your trade that will affect
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 and you will see better results ,the main reason to given support
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 claim to be on a market you will see many challenges and that give you lots of experience and you will archive your goals and your dreams . In
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other word when you have your own business that
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 you should
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work every time in the evening and morning and you should follow up on everything that goes from
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 to a large subject.
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gives you many benefits,
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 that will help you to improve your skills and work under pressure ,On the other you will know about the environment of the labour market and build a strong relationship, Which will help you if you looking to have your own company on the future .
Secondly
 many leaders today their a monthly salary
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 100,000 SAR ,So not in many situations
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 your own business is the best choice
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you will gain more than what you want if just fox to develop yourself and gain any opportunities in your life . In conclusion, to choose which is the best is something not equal because that depends on the personality and acknowledged field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • autonomy
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • financial instability
  • self-motivation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • healthcare
  • retirement plans
  • administrative tasks
  • compliance
  • isolation
  • camaraderie
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