The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graphs depict data about the type and the total
number
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of uses the electric households in a week from 1920 until 2019.
Overall
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, the using of electrical appliances in our home saw a significant increase.
However
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, the
time
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of using that tool decreased dramatically over the decades. In 1920, the
number
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of people who used a vacuum cleaner was only half of the peak. From 30% in 1920 rose massively by 60 per cent to 100%
at the end
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of 2019.
On the other hand
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, many people in 1920 did not utilise refrigerators in their homes. After 1920 the
number
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of individuals who used refrigerators saw a rise remarkably to 100% in 1980 and remained stable until 2019.
While
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,
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washing machines were the most popular household in 1920.
However
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, the
number
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of families who used washing machines declined minimally to just over 60% and the trend recovered to over 70% in 2019.
In contrast
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,
although
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the trend of electrical households increased
time
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by
time
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there was not has significant impact on using
time
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. The
number
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of hours used by households in our home for housework from 1920 saw a
dropped
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from 50 hours a week to only
just slightly
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10 hours/week in 2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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