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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the past few years, environmental pollution
is
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 considered
as
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a big issue which has a negative influence on the ecosystem. Increasing the price of gasoline is regarded as
a
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 best way to tackle the situation of
enviromental
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environmental
 problems. I totally disagree with that viewpoint for a number of reasons which will be outlined in
this
 essay. It is evident that numerous benefits
of
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rising
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raising
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 the cost of
fuels
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fuel
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.
First,
increasing the gas fees can reduce human reliance on fossil fuels which
decrease
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 the commuting demand of citizens, especially those who have to live on tight budgets. If the country has
less
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 private vehicles, the
volumn
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volume
 of CO2 emissions released into the air will be cut down.
However
,
this
 approach can be effective in the short term and the environmental problems stem from a great number of causes which need long-term goals.
On the other hand
, I have some better measures to take into account for environmental issues.
First,
it is imperative for the authorities to invest in public transport or infrastructure which has some welfare for encouraging residents to use various types of
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 transport.
As a consequence
, the air pollution and traffic congestion will be reduced.
Besides
, education is
put as
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a top priority for
environment
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environmental
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 protection which makes a decisive contribution to
raise
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 public awareness of citizens and
change
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 their
mind
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of
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about
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 living
a
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greener. Each individual becomes a positive citizen of a nation and enhances the quality of the environment by their own knowledge. In conclusion,
although
 raising the cost of gasoline is beneficial, I am of the opinion that better
alternative
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 will
be address
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 effectively
due to
education
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the education
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 system and the encouragement
for
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 citizens
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Task Achievement
Make sure to fully address the question prompt by discussing both sides of the argument, including why some may agree with the increase in fuel costs, followed by your reasons for disagreement. Expand on each point with clear examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Maintain a logical flow of ideas by using cohesive devices appropriately without over-reliance on them.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disproportionately affect
  • renewable sources
  • solar energy
  • equity in environmental policies
  • exacerbating social inequalities
  • incentivizing
  • subsidies
  • strict regulations
  • industrial emissions
  • sustainable local production
  • carbon footprints
  • punitive measures
  • sustainability efforts
  • robust and lasting changes
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