Nowadays people are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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waste
is getting higher day by day. In
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will examine the factors that contribute towards
this
issue and propose some solutions to them. In terms of the root cause of
rubbish
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the rubbish
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accumulation
problem
may vary.
Firstly
,
this
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circumstances happen because least awareness of
public
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the public
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about
manage
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their household
waste
.
This
practice
need
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needs
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consistency and basic knowledge of types of
waste
,
however
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society
assume
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that it is too complicated.
Therefore
, the rubbish
are
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mixed in the end of
landfill
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the landfill
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, hard to
seperate
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separate
between organic or
non organic
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non-organic
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, and
make
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makes
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a mountain of
dump
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there.
Secondly
, the
government
not
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does not
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see
the
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waste
as
major
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a major
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problem
.
Thus
, they do not take any serious actions to resolve it. To illustrate,
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the Indonesia
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Indonesia
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Indonesian
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government
only take a small action towards
waste
management,
such
as
enlarge
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enlarging
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the dump centre but it is not a
long term
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sustainable solution. A possible solution to
this
problem
should be
coordinate
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by the
government
. A policy is essential as a foundation to plan, implement and
monitored
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monitor
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any step that should be taken by all stakeholders.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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also
should
doing
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do
be doing
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a real action
do
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and do
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some
survey
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surveys
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or
observation
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observations
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about the
condition
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conditions
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that
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faced by
public
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the public
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.
Additionally
,
fine
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a fine
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or penalty is necessary to make sure all the
process
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processes
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run appropriately. To complete it,
government
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the government
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must do intensive socialization to society.
For instance
,
Ministry
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the Ministry
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of Environment of Indonesia
start
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started
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for
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drafting the regulation about
waste
management from upstream to downstream as a commitment to reduce carbon emissions in 2030. In conclusion, the main
problem
of trash being piled up
is came
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comes
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from least
conciousness
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consciousness
of individuals and
government
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the government
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to manage it.
This
essay suggested that the
solutions
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of
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this
problem
is having a comprehensive law or fundamental and it is
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the government
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government
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government's
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responsibility.
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