The charts below show information about the annual profits, the final stock prices and the market share of five different video game companies in 2022.

The charts below show information about the annual profits, the final stock prices and the market share of five different video game companies in 2022.
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The bar chart illustrates the annual
profits
of five video game companies,
while
the table compares each company's final
stock
and
market
share
in 2022.
Overall
,
Bitmaster
was the most successful company in terms of income and
market
share
,
while
Gamazing had the lowest
profits
and contribution to the
market
.
To begin
with, in 2022,
Bitmaster
, Dataright and Dimensional all had
profits
above 75 million
dollars
, with
Bitmaster
leading the way at 125 million
dollars
.
This
was reflected in their respective
market
shares, with
Bitmaster
having the highest at 20%, and a final
stock
price
of 115.27
dollars
per
share
. Despite having a lower
market
share
of 17%, Dimensional had a higher final
stock
price
than
Bitmaster
at 123.88
dollars
per
share
.
On the other hand
, Graphiz and Gamazing had
profits
below 75 million
dollars
and
consequently
had the lowest
market
shares and final
stock
prices in 2022.
Graphiz
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Graphic
had a
market
share
of 10% and a final
stock
price
of around 50
dollars
per
share
,
while
Gamazing had a
market
share
of 4% and a final
stock
price
of 23
dollars
per
share
.
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