The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television.​ Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support you position.

In
this
concurrent age, the
internet
has
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is
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best suited for an array of people’s
live
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lives
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rather than TV.
Therefore
, its usability became popular
amongest
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amongst
them
as well as
it can assist their daily work. I agree with
this
notion and will explain every part by citing
ilustration
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illustration
and conclude with my standpoint.
To begin
with,
internet
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the internet
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provides
flexibility
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flexible
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features which can be accessed anywhere without
boundaris
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boundaries
as long as it provides the
newtork
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New York
. It helps people who want to enjoy the news and entertainment when they
could not
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cannot
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bring the
tv
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TV
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every where
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everywhere
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they go.
For instance
, students are forbidden to bring their television as their information resource when they go on a
fieldtrip
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field trip
, but
internet
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the internet
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does. Its wireless
makes
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means
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the information can
access
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be accessed
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in every kind of gadget.
In
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the other hand, the marketing allocation for
producting
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producing
production
could be decreased by using
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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. Based on the Indonesia Times magazine in 2020,
Indonesian
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Indonesia
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become the
bigest
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biggest
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society
whose
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that
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using
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uses
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social media as
their
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its
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secondary news.
Simultanousely
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Simultaneously
citizen
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citizens
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who
access
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accesses
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social media which is connected globally
make
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makes
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the
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apply
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digital marketer pay
their
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apply
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attention more than television.
Moreover
, some marketers leave the television which
absorp
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absorbs
expense in
advertaisment
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advertisement
advertisements
and prefer using social media to release their products and services. In conclusion, the portable
of
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apply
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Internet
helps an array of people to access
the
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apply
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information everywhere. In the same way,
this
massive attention
also
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is also
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benificial
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beneficial
for
the
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apply
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marketers to reduce the production cost of services and products in terms of
less
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fewer
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ads than TV.
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Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and your position. Make sure the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and restates your opinion.
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Your essay needs to have a clear logical structure. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to establish the main idea you will discuss.
task achievement
Support the main points with specific and relevant examples. Avoid vague statements and ensure your examples clearly illustrate the point you are trying to make.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to spelling, grammar, and punctuation. Mistakes can detract from the clarity and coherence of your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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