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Writing Samples
Band 5

You need to take some time off from work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager. In your letter: Ask for time off and explain why Provide the dates and times for which you will be unavailable to work Describe what you will do to prepare or make up for your absence

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing
this
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 letter to request you to approve my
holidays
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holiday
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in
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apply
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next week. As you know my leaves are lapsing. so, I have decided to plan holidays for my Family.
From
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For
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last
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the last
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 six
month
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months
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 I have not taken any
leaves
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leave
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. My wife and children are requesting me to take them on holiday. I am planning to take them on holiday between 21 to 25 December.
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, I will not be able to
work
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 on these days.
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, I have completed all the files which you had assigned me. To compensate for
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my leaves
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leaves
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leave
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 I will
work
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 on weekends in January 2024. I am ready to take on
additional
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an additional
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 workload next month.
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, I will make sure that all
work
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 assigned will be completed
in
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by
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expected
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the expected
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 deadline. I will
work
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 on Saturdays
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next month.
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, if there is
need
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a need
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 to
work
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 on Sundays too. I will
work
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 on Sundays. Yours Sincerely, Steve Waugh

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your letter follows a clear logical structure, with a distinct introduction, body paragraphs focused on individual points, and a clear conclusion. Avoid mixing multiple ideas in a single paragraph.
coherence cohesion
While your introduction and conclusion are suitably formatted, consider improving the logical flow within the body of your letter to enhance readability.
task achievement
To fully achieve the task, make sure to address all parts of the prompt in appropriate detail. Your letter should not only ask for leave but also provide clear, specific dates and a detailed plan of how you will handle work in your absence.
task achievement
Maintain a tone that is polite, formal, and appropriate for a workplace environment. While your tone is generally suitable, be cautious of being too casual or assuming approval of your request.
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