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The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.
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The given line graph reveals
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the
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information about three different types of incidents (Burglary,
Car
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 theft, Robbery) that happened in Newport City Center from 2003 to 2012.
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while
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 the sum of burglaries declined sharply,
car
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 thefts and robberies remained unchanged with minimal fluctuation. Another noticeable point is, that robbery was the least crime incident in the particular area over the entire span. Moving to the details, in 2003, the statistic of burglaries was just below 3500,
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in contrast
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car
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 thefts were about 2750. In 2004, the burglary crimes reached a peak of nearly 3750. After that, it declined sharply by just above 1000.
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, after 2008, the figure for burglaries shows a fluctuation in the following years. When it comes to
car
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 theft crime, there was a fluctuation over the period given. In the beginning, there were approximately 2750 incidents. Having said that,
at the end
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 of the period, it decreased slightly by nearly 2400. In 2003, robberies were just above 500, albeit in 2012, it remained steady over the observed period given.
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, it depicts a steady number of crimes of theft except in 2005.
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, there were approximately 500 robberies in the entire span.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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