The diagrams above illustrate changes made to a Cinema from 1980 until now.

The diagrams above illustrate changes made to a Cinema from 1980 until now.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams above illustrate changes made to a Cinema from 1980 until now.
The diagrams above illustrate changes made to
a
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Cinema
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from 1980 until now.
Overall
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, there has been the addition of new
cinema
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rooms
as well as
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a food and drinks shop, a relaxing
room
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and a DVD shop. The parking has been completely demolished. Looking at the diagrams in more detail, as you walk through the entrance, on the
left hand
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side
the
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apply
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Cinema
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room
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number 1 has been moved closer to the toilets.
Also
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,
room
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number 2 has decreased marginally in size since 1980 and has now been moved directly opposite
room
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1. The parking has been obliterated to make
room
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for the addition of three new
cinema
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rooms. Towards the left of the entrance there is now a food and drinks and relax
room
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that
are
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is
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in place of where
cinema
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room
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1 used to be. Towards the right, the ticket booth is still in the same place,
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however
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however,
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the drinks section has been moved and replaced with a DVD shop.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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