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Band 5.5

The maps describe how town changed between 1990 nad 2010

Both maps show the important changes which have happened during
Correct article usage
the
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last
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 twenty years. At first glance, the
town
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 has changed a lot. Only three buildings have stayed
at
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in
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 the same place - the school, the library, and the hospital which has been enlarged.
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Also
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Also,
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 the High Street has persisted across the middle of the
town
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. The playing fields with trees near
to
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apply
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the school were replaced by the block of flats,
similarly
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,
such
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 as the houses on the other side of the High Street. The café and park between the High Street and block of flats were replaced by
hotel
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a hotel
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 and golf course. Near to the hotel , where used to be a theatre, it is possible to find the cinema. Shops were rebuilt in
supermarket
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supermarkets
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, and technopark was built in the previous area of trees in the south of the
town
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. The
town
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 was accommodated to the needs of inhabitants, and the facilities
provide
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provided
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 more comfort and
place
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a place
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 for living.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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