With the increased global demand in oil amd gas, undiscovered areas of world should be opened up to access more resources.
Nowadays growing demand of the population and the higher use of
energy
for daily consumption has increased dramatically That is
why the fulfill the power requirement people have started discovering new places to satisfy the demand for energy
. But I completely disagree with this
argument.
First of all, gaining new resources is a good thing but it has some hazardous effects. Environmental risks are the main factors that need to take
care of, with Wrong verb form
be taken
the
access to Correct article usage
apply
energy
in newly discovered areas
has
a risk Verb problem
is
to spills
Change preposition
of spilling
oil
on nature this
way we put their local habitat in danger. Sometimes by fault, we kill wild animals and unknown species of plants. For example
, Studies show that about on earth 26% of the land has been habitual because of the oil
spill and fire-prone areas
because of getting more valuable resources in a new
Correct the article-noun agreement
new areas
a new area
areas
.
On the other hand
, building new and alternative sources of oil
and gas needs a significant amount of money that build the power station and the reservoirs to collect the power to use it later. Because of this
construction the damage to nature and another habitat
. Fix the agreement mistake
other habitats
In addition
, because of the construction and energy
losses increased greenhouse gases. For instance
, the newspaper Times shows that because of creating new sources of energy
some islands are heavily polluted because of leakage of gases and oil
. Whereas
, with the leaking of oil
and gases increased pollution on earth that’s why undiscovered areas
are never opened for gaining new resources.
In conclusion, however
need for energy
has increased but, the need for energy
environmental protection and social concerns has increased.Submitted by swapnilingale1155 on
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