The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter: • Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly • Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours • Suggest what should be done about the problem
Dear Madam or Sir,
I am living at Baker St. No:221. I would like to express my dissatisfaction about
rubbish
collection system malfunction. The problem started Correct article usage
the rubbish
last
friday
, Change the capitalization
Friday
although
a week passed, the problem still remains. Normally, garbage trucks come to our street and evacuate the trash box three times Correct word choice
and although
in
a week. There were no trucks from Change preposition
apply
last
friday
.
Unfortunately, now our Change the capitalization
Friday
neighborhood
is full of trash and there is a disgusting smell around the whole street. The roads are closed because of Change the spelling
neighbourhood
trashes
, Correct subject-verb agreement
trash
therefore
we can not park our cars. There are too many mice in the neighborhood
Change the spelling
neighbourhood
especially
in Add the comma(s)
, especially
playground
, Add an article
the playground
a playground
hence
my kids and my neighbours' kids can not play anymore.
Our neighborhood
is not safe and clean now , I would be extremely grateful if you could solve Change the spelling
neighbourhood
this
system mulfunction
.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours Faithfully,
Merve KerküklüCorrect your spelling
malfunction
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and remains on topic. The current letter can benefit from more clear paragraphing separating description, effect, and suggestions.
task achievement
While the complaint and suggestions are mentioned, more specific details or examples could strengthen the task response. Additionally, offering a solution or recommendation to address the issue can help achieve a higher score.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite