An increasing number of developing countries are expanding tourist industries. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
These days,
tourism
sector has revolutionised rapidly as compared to the past period Add an article
the tourism
due to
globalisation. As a result
, some developing nations
try to be
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expaned
the Correct your spelling
expand
tourism
sectors. Ths
trend has benefits Correct your spelling
This
as well as
drawbacks, even though, I think this
trend has more advantages outweigh the disadvantages. This
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
There are some merits of improving tourism
fields in the second-tire
countries. One of the major benefits is that many Correct your spelling
second-tier
traveler
may Change to a plural noun
travelers
be visited
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visit
in
these Change preposition
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nations
while
local vendors and folks can obtain more earnings from tourists, and as a result
, their livelihood can be improved. For example
, traveler
have to spend more money to buy things and travel in order to they can explore places when they stay in the developing Fix the agreement mistake
travelers
nations
. Another advantage is that the authority
get more taxes from Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
tourism
, therefore
, this
amount can spend
to develop the infrastructure of the Wrong verb form
be spent
nations
, thus
, the population will get all the amenities like hi-tech road
.
There are several demerits of Fix the agreement mistake
roads
this
phenomenon. One of the major disadvantages is that natural resources might be diminished by over
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consumptions
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consumption
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
nations
have only limited resources while
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which
it
can be decreased by innumerable Correct pronoun usage
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traveler
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travelers
by
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them
For instance
, India has limited water resource
but many tourists visit and use Fix the agreement mistake
resources
this
resource enormously, consequently
, the future generation will be suffered
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suffer
the
scarcity of water. Another demerit is that traffic congestion Change preposition
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increased drastically for Verb problem
has
tourist
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tourists
visit
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visiting
nations
and already face this
issue in these nations
.
To conclude
, although
improving the local people's livelihood and developing infrastructure are the advantages, increasing traffic problem
and reducing the natural resources are the disadvantages of Fix the agreement mistake
problems
this
phenomenon. However
, I think this
tendency has more benefits outweigh the drawbacks.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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