This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
Line
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graph illustrates the difference
of
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in
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material
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materials
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from 1982 to 2010 that were recycled in a country.
Overall
, the
most
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highest
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recycling
rate
of selected materials was reached by "paper&cardboard". The second place
have
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got "
glass
containers
". The other 2 places that were selected were "
Aluminium
cans
" and "
Plastics
".
To begin
with, in 1982,
recycle
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the recycling
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of paper
have
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reached close to 65%
when
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while
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containers
made of
glass
got
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reached
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about 50 %. In 1990, paper and cardboard sharply
rised
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raised
risen
rose
close to 70%
when
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while
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containers
made of
glass
dramatically decreased to about 40%.
However
, before 1990 from 1986,
aluminium
cans
started
from
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at
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about 7% and
rate
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the rate
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of recycling
have got
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was
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closely
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10
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to 10
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%.
Also
at that period of time, the
recycle
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recycling
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of
plastics
were
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was
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started by individuals from about 4 %. In 1994, all of
selected
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the selected
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materials modestly started to
climbing
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to different rates. Cardboard reached 80% when
glass
containers
had been
raising
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raised
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to the
rate
of 50 % that have reached by
glass
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the glass
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before,
likewise
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likewise,
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cans
made of
aluminium
that
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increased to about 15 %.
Also
,
plastics
rocket moderately to about 8%. Starting from 1994, paper&cardboard
begun
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decling
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declining
decline
slowly, and
at the end
of 2010, the
rate
of paper reached
to
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apply
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70%
when
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while
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glass
containers
increased close to 60%.
Aluminium
cans
steeply
grow
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grew
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up to about 45% and
plastics
got 9 %.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, glass, containers, aluminium, cans, plastics with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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